High Expectations - final draft

When presenting our first draft to the rest of the class we were given the following negative responses for our film, and areas which we were advised to improve:

• No voiceover
• A line should be put in place to split the screens better at the beginning
• It should be shorter (less than 2 minutes)
• Use a more appealing colour and font on the titles
• Include the production company logo and film title

As you can tell in the final draft, we have included a voiceover from one of the main characters, Charlotte, who explains life with her best friend Grace and how she wants to be popular in school. We have also inserted a black line down the middle of the screen to show the split screen more clearly to the audience. We had to do this through finding an image of a black line and transporting it onto Final Cut Pro using photoshop. We have taken out a few of the shots that were previously in the opening scene and we have also trimmed a few of the shots in the title sequence using the blade on Final Cut Pro. This means that we have managed to reduce our total title sequence and opening scene time from 02:22 to 02:00, which was our target. 

We previously used a sans serif font with plain white text colour for the titles and we were advised to change this to make it more appealing for the audience. We have done this and now some of the titles are pink while others are still white, but we have also changed the font so now it looks more like fancy handwriting which is something that a female teenage audience would find much more appealing. We have also included the production company logo as well as the movie title which we added in using a fade transition to make it appear and disappear on the screen more attractively. We also decided to insert an arrow pointing at Charlotte when she introduces herself in the voiceover. This is to assist the understanding from the audience's point of view, and it also makes the overall appearance of the shot more appealing.